Saturday, May 12, 2012

Peter’s Descriptive Writing

As a part of our Narrative unit we are trying to improve our descriptive writing. Our goal is to improve our descriptive language to help the reader understand the setting

I was traveling through the forest when the car ran out of petrol. We had to camp for the night.

Then suddenly I saw a spooky castle. I went up closer. There was a swamp that had sharks and man eating crocodiles. At the front of the castle a big  draw bridge with two big chains.The castle's door was big and heavy with a big rusty handle.

1 comment:

  1. Great job at descriptive writing Peter! We liked how you said the castle was spooky and there was a swamp with sharks and even man-eating crocodiles! Some of us were scared. Miss Wild said she could see the castle and what it looked it in her head. Well done!

    From your friends @Pt England School, Auckland.