Shark Dive- Writing

We watch the above video about a Shark Dive. We use our imagination as if we were diving with the sharks. Our writing focus was on using more descriptive words to create more of a picture for the reader.'

Also we wanted to use different connectives to replace 'then".

Enjoy our recounts of our Shark Dives.

Chloe -

I was sitting on the boat cuddling my mum and chewing my nails. Next, I jumped into the water with my sister.

The first thing I saw was a school of black stripy fish. The ocean was dark and deep. I was swimming around with my sister there were lots of things in the sea. Then I saw a enormous shadow. Suddenly, my sister shouted, " Its a shark". My sister and I were terrified, so we swum up to the boat . Our dad helped us up and we were safe.Then the shark haunted us for ever.

Bella--

I was dying to get in. I had to jump into the dark ocean but when I hit the water, it was freezing. I was shivering all over. When the bubbles cleared I saw a school of fish. Suddenly, I saw a dark shadow lurking in the distance. It came closer and closer, and right up to me. AAAAAhhhh!!!!

I was terrified!!! I started to swim to the surface but the shark bit my hand. I was screaming. It was the scariest thing I did. I swum up to the surface and climbed into the boat . I bandage my hand.